Poem ..October

[safinshussy]

Forbidden Utopia

I composed this poem last year and wish to share its emotional depth with you all. thank you.

Inspired by a very special tennis player.


he stands there
the ball between his enormous hands.
hit hit hit
i look into his eyes
his massive power,
controlling me.
i cannot speak, nor listen,
as he controls.

it rips my heart tear tear tear
those hands, back , feet, fingers.
those eyes, oh, but those eyes.
i fall, a hopeless prey.
he swings me force force force
we must surrender.

i feel the sting on my face.
like the harsh sands of time,
yet now, they bruise my eyes.
now, he bruises my body.
darkness darkness darkness
for his eternal pleasure is my pain.


Cara J-

[love15]

wow.. thAts a pretty deep and down right twisted poem, if u dont mind me sayin.
how long did it take you to write?

love15

[raghda]

i feel the sting on my face.
like the harsh sands of time,
yet now, they bruise my eyes.
now, he bruises my body.
darkness darkness darkness
for his eternal pleasure is my pain.

Wow

[safinshussy]

the poem took me only minutes to write. i was in such one trance, i suprised myself with its inner most quality. i truly welcome eveyones feed back and/or critisism, so please do not hesitate to ask questions or give me a responce to your reaction.

[Joy]

I loved the level of abstraction in it Cara....keep up the good work.

Joy